Commentary Outline

Part 1-

- In part one I will introduce the trend of skateboarding and bicycling on sidewalks at UCF that I am unhappy with and explain what about the trend upsets me.

Part 2-

- In part two I will give my first hand experiences with this trend and provide examples and visuals as to why this trend is unsatisfactory, annoying, and dangerous. Perspective from a students view.

Part 3-

- In part three I will provide research feedback from another student I have interviewed on the topic and information on the start of this trend and give his opinion.

Part 4-

- In part four I will give examples of the dangers of this trend from friend injuries and possible occurrences like my friend falling off his board and getting scraped up.

Part 5-

- In part five I will explain what I believe campus would be like without this trend, if the sidewalks were for walking only.

+ changes that need to be made to rough draft- include more of the other prospective on the topic; made bolder, more obvious thesis statement; add partner interview as a research source; find when the trend started and use research source; make citations and word cited pgage( in lungsford book); put in MLA format